I really like that, no sound is a sound. You said so much with so few words!
Thanks Helen, this was just a snippet that came to mind, I was tempted to expand it, but decided to leave it as it was.
Hide! Read in the right voice, I could imagine this being very effective. It was fun to go through.
Thanks John, I think this is something that could be read as either light-hearted or sinister, depending on your inner voice, and how you interpret it.
The importance of a tiny change, brought to life.
Hiya Larry, sometimes tiny changes can have massive consequences, can't they?
Such an ominous ending to such a poetic beginning. Nice one.
Thank you Tim, John's interpretation and your own are almost opposites, echoing the ambiguity of the story.I think this could be thought of a someone or something being found by a predator, or something as innocent as children playing hide and seek.
Another bonzai bombshell. Who knew that small could be beautiful? It's looking like it was a fun Friday, yesterday.How low can drabbles go, I wonder, and still remain punchy?
Thank you AB. I love the expression "Bonsai bombshell".At 69 words this is not my shortest flash, I posted one back in May called "42 The meaning of life" which was 42 words long, you can find it here if you would like to read it. http://greenstephenj.blogspot.co.uk/2012/05/42-meaning-of-life.html Thank you for the very complimentary comment. :-)
Oh... now there's a nice one... well done!
Hiya Cathy, thank you for the very kind words. :-)
I enjoy these smaller pieces of work, my friend.Small and powerful yet again.I like the duality it represents:a small change can indeed have a large impact. Whether for good or ill it really depends on which side the coin lands.Well done!
Thank you E.J. Although I do write longer stories, some stretching to around 3k, most of my flashes tend to be in the 200-500 word bracket, this is the area I most enjoy working in, and it's always a real confidence boost when it works for the reader.
Wonderful, Steve! You've captured the utter silence of this world so well that the last line conveys, for me, how terrifying even the softest of sounds would be.
Hiya Dawn, and welcome. Thank you for the very kind comment, the story is definitely open to interpretation, but like yourself readers are mostly favouring the sinister angle.
Lots of sound in this week's flashes! Loved this. There was a real sense of panic in that last line.
Thank you Icy, being discovered can quite often turn a situation from safety to danger.
I know you could take this to be sinister if you thought the narrator was hiding from someone but I thought it could have been children playing hide and seek or simply someone trying to find some peace in a secluded spot and having others come close to that. Wonderfully atmospheric piece, Steve, I really enjoyed how much of a punch that delivered.
Kath, thank you for the very lovely comment. It has been good to note the different ways readers have viewed and interpreted this flash.
You have a real knack for these extra short pieces Steve. Really fires up the imagination. Makes me wonder who they are and who discovered them,
Thanks Craig, I never really decided who, or what they may be, probably not human though.
Should it be horror evoked from that last line, or should it be a light emotion, game of hide and seek? I like guessing! For me it worked deffinitely as a horrific moment, I got this very poetic, mystic tone in the previous lines and then... Great stuff!
Thank you Cindy, like yourself, most people see this as a horror moment rather than something more innocent.